Mes textes

Bonjour à tous, salut à toutes, c'est tndr1 !

J'écris des textes et je voulais votre avis, voilà, merci :

"Am I already the last one?
Are theses lives already burned?
I'm now alone in the dark
It was too fast according to me
I must do it once again
To feed my eternal hatred..."

I'm coming back in the shadows
Bringing you pain, death and sorrow!
You're lost it's your turn now
My scythe will now drink your blood!

[CHORUS]
Hatred, guide me to my next victim
And make real my favourite dreams
Bringing you pain, fear and sorrow
I am back from far below

So wait a red sun to arise
For you there's no paradise
I'll take you to a place of cries
Die by the light in my eyes

I'm here!

"Are you already the last one?
Are these lives already gone?
We're now alone in the dark
Now your death is coming near
See the deadlight in my eyes
I'm feeding my hate inside!"

[SOLOS]

You're crying, running and screaming
You're afraid and desperate
But you'll learn something:
Never I will set you free

[CHORUS]

Your blood's now running on the ground
Suffocate in the last seconds of your life
Oh God I need to kill again
To take more and more humans in my grave

[CHORUS]

Voilà ! Merci de laisser vos impressions. Ciao !

PS : Pas la peine de me demander "Je peux utiliser tes textes ?" ou de les utiliser sans mon consentement, ils m'appartiennent ainsi qu'à mon groupe, IBAN !
Et quand on aura enregistré la musique, je la mettrai ici !

waow ça change de la chanson française
par contre j'ai repéré une petite erreur au début


theses n'existe pas, c'est these ou those, mais j'imagine que c'est juste une faute de frappe, tu l'as écris juste par la suite

Merci
Ouais faute de frappe

Il y a pas mal de tournures "bizarres", tu parles anglais couramment ?

Des tournures bizarres ? Où ça ?
Et non malheureusement, je parle pas anglais couramment

Ben le tout sonne très "traduit" je trouve. On sent que ce n'est pas ta langue.

J'étudie beaucoup de paroles d'autres groupes, donc même si mon niveau n'est pas exceptionnel ça doit aller
...
Enfin normalement

Oui c'est loin d'être catastrophique hein !!
Perso ça me dérange mais je suis un pénible

et toi tu parles couramment anglais ?

Oui pratiquement mais ce n'est pas le sujet-là non ?

Non je crois pas mais c'est pas grave y a quand même un rapport
Je posterai les prochains textes prochainement j'en ai 6 en réserve mais je fais pas tout d'un coup, faut du suspens

Night Of War (Paroles : tndr1 - Musique : IBAN)

I've got some lava flowing in my veins
Now it's time to break the chains
I open my eyes to see
Something that should not be

I want my world of hate and desire
I see the ground going up in fire
Hatred's growing there's no more wasted tears
The sound of death is coming with these fears

Daylight fades away
There's no escape, yeah!
Tonight's gonna be
Something wild or won't be

I can't controll hate in my heart
In this night of war

I've got the key of sorrow
Key of death, key of souls
Beautiful I'm powerful
From now on the Reaper rules

With my red blood scythe
And the sharpness of my teeth
The blue moon will drink some blood
I'll spill in the woods
The blood of all mankind!

I don't wanna control myself
Never lies I tell
In the nights of war, yeah
I only wanna kill everyone
To be the last one

Sometimes when everything's dark I ask the God to die
But usually to find another way I try
The shadows took my mind and anger took my heart
I'll bring death and war!

Fire shines bright in the skies
There's a red light in my eyes
There was a slain with me in shadows
I lost my reason to love...

"So all's gone...
I can't leave this nightmare...
I will live forever more"
I got my world tonight
I won the fight
These flames have burned this land
And my heart

No remain of kindness
Or compassion
I'm the one who survived
To my own hatred

The last angel cries in front of this chaos
That came so fast, aloud and across
The last one still alive it's me, no-one else
I threw this world into the fires of hell...
Right!